Proof points: elevate your copy with a touch of reality

Evidence, II
The words you write on the web don’t carry much weight. Corporate web copy is littered with platitudes, boasts, claims and statements of ‘facts’ – all with questionable levels of truthiness. Because any company can claim to be:

  • experts
  • experienced
  • creative
  • enterprising
  • this list could go on forever

the words are weak.

Great web copy gets beyond empty words and offers something tangible.

Don’t claim to be an expert in your field. Demonstrate your experience with copy that reveals your knowledge. Get down to details – talk of things that only the initiated know about. You don’t have to bore people with your technical prowess, just give them a hint of the expert knickers under your corporate skirt.

Your web copy is not the only way to reassure visitors that you really are experienced/creative/enterprising/expert. Make liberal use of testimonials, case studies and portfolio pieces to give proof. The imagery and design of your website is crucial in this respect.

Ask yourself how you can stand out from every other business that claims to be the best – how can you show that you’re the best?

Coming to terms with ‘content’

Common questions from the content creator

Not so long ago, I objected to the word ‘content’ when used to describe the words and pictures that populate websites. ‘Content’ seemed degrading, a lowly term for what might be carefully-crafted copy, perfectly-composed pictures or a web-cam wizard’s captivating video.

So ‘content’ doesn’t sound amazing. It’s a bit like calling the words between the covers of Don Quixote ‘filling’, or ‘text’.

But ‘content’ is what everyone calls content. The word works.

And now ‘content’ is increasingly discussed in a smarter way. We’re not just writing some stuff because there are pages to fill; we formulate content strategies to help us think bigger about what we’re doing. We think bigger and demonstrate a bigger intention. Copy is more than copy and that’s great for the web because it means copy and content can rise to their rightful place in the world of the web.

So I’ve come round to content.

Why I want to talk to your people

Conversation, NYC, 1970

Good copywriters will talk to you. They’ll ask you questions that will draw out useful information. They’ll be bloodhounds on the trail of wounded meat. They know what they’re after: the pieces of information that matter most to your clients. Once they’ve found it, the good copywriter retreats to his lair to write.

Great copywriters want to talk to your people. They know that you don’t know everything, so they want to talk to Jane in the stockroom, Greg in customer services and your most loyal customers. Great copywriters know that the best way to reveal the heart of your business – the heart that must be captured, contained and displayed on the web page – is to delve deep.

Content strategy: the new name for copywriting?

Battle Formation

I’ve been hearing more and more talk about ‘content strategy’ recently. Unsure what it was, I went looking for answers.
I found:

What is Content Strategy?

Content strategy plans for the creation, publication, and governance of useful, usable content.

Necessarily, the content strategist must work to define not only which content will be published, but why we’re publishing it in the first place.

Otherwise, content strategy isn’t strategy at all: it’s just a glorified production line for content nobody really needs or wants

From: The Discipline of Content Strategy by Kristina Halvorson

I was hoping to discover an interesting new discipline, but I feel like I’ve just discovered a new way to describe copywriting.

More time passed, and I began to warm to content strategy.

Why? Because ‘copy’ is the most important but least respected part of the web. Web copy is often thrashed out at the last minute, after a hundred interaction designers, user experience designers, information architects, designers, developers and colour consultants have spent months refining their corner of the website – and that’s just plain stupid. Copy is neglected, but maybe it’s neglected because nobody has pushed a serious alternative – nobody has pushed a grown-up approach to producing copy.

Copy needs to be more than copy for it to be taken seriously. A copywriter needs to be more than just a rent-a-pen. There needs to be a method, a strategy, a process for producing amazing copy, and if content strategy can be all of that, then wonderful.

I look forward to learning more about content strategy.

Copywriters – how can we kill the jargon?

Panama Business 2

Copywriters! It’s time to fight back against jargon. Who’s with me?

A battle-cry

We all know that good copy is concise, open and easy for everyone to understand. Good copy relies on captivating stories, clear messages and compelling benefits. Jargon and management-speak are not part of the good copywriter’s toolbox. A large part of a copywriter’s work involves detecting BS, stripping it from copy and replacing it with something real.

How do we fight the tide of jargon?

We know the perils of jargon, but how do we handle clients who love it?

I have clients who cannot bear to call their spades “spades”, because “spade” doesn’t sound sophisticated enough, or because (allegedly) the garden managers they sell to do not respond to such lowly language – these captains of industry must read of “soil-shifting leverage devices” – anything but “spade”.

I argue, I persuade, I persist. But however hard I try, some clients remain locked to their ideas, convinced that pseudo-smart fancy-pants copy is the best thing for their business.

Please help!

I want to know your secrets, your tactics and your tips for dealing with clients who love jargon. Do you cite evidence – perhaps a book or a blog post. Do you have stats? Is there a pie-chart I can lob at recalcitrant clients?

Copify: the cheap and miserable way to procure copy

Copify is a new company that connects copywriters with content-wanters. So if you need a 500-word article on cat litter you can go to Copify and get a poorly-briefed stranger to churn out some generic words to fill your content hole.

Some copywriters are mildly outraged because Copify pays writers £0.02 – 0.08 per word. So writing that 500-word article on cat litter will earn you £10 – £40. If you spend 2-3 hours working on the article (I’m hoping you’ll research cat litter before you write…) you’ll earn as little as £3.30 per hour. Not a lot!

Having said all that, I don’t object to Copify. But I would never ever seek work from Copify and I would never recommend them to anyone as a source of content.

Copify fills a need. Some people need words. And they don’t really care which words you give them, because they want generic SEO-friendly filler content. Or backlink fodder. Either way they really don’t care about the words, or which order you put them in (so long as you meet their word count!).

Copify already exists in other shapes and sizes. Some agencies get trainee web designers to churn out content, while others pay students £10 per article. Guru and other freelance ‘job’ websites offer thousands of junk jobs that people are free to take if they have the time and the inclination to work for peanuts. And theoretically a super-fast writer could cut and paste some rubbish together in a few minutes and do quite well out of Copify, so who are we to stand in the way?

Services like Copify will not affect the business of professional copywriters because lots of people need professional copywriters, as opposed to a copy vending machine that spits out low-grade copy for stupidly-low prices.

Great blog post discussing the perils of paying copywriters per word

14 questions copywriters must ask their clients

Election Interrogation

Being a freelance copywriter isn’t just about writing. Words are the tool that copywriters use to achieve results, but every smart copywriter understands that their real function is to quickly and accurately deliver a business proposition.

Before you can write about a business, you have to get the business. You have to understand what a business does and what’s important to their customers. You have to get down to the details, and prepare to write on behalf of a business.

Here are 14 key questions that copywriters should ask their clients, in order to get the information required to write great copy:

  • Why do your customers choose you?
  • What aspects of your business are you most proud of?
  • Why did you start this business?
  • What questions do new customers frequently ask?
  • What features do your customers look for in your products?
  • What benefits do your customers get from your products?
  • Who are your customers?
  • What are your customers primarily interested in?
  • Who are your competitors?
  • What is the typical process you go through with a customer?
  • Can I talk to your customers?
  • Can I have a tour of your factory or a chat with an operative? (to get a bird’s eye view of the business)
  • What tone is appropriate for your copy?
  • Why did you pick me? (this one is a useful insight into your own marketing)

    Now this seems obvious to me, but I’ve rescued a few clients from the clutches of copywriters who have asked no questions at all, and then produced irrelevant and totally inappropriate copy.

    So it’s important to ask questions, but also to ask insightful questions that provoke useful answers.

    Being Funny in Web Copy: A Guide to When and How

    Funny Church Signs
    Have you ever wondered whether it’s okay (or appropriate) to pepper your web copy with humour? How do you decide when it’s a good time to be funny?

    Humour can please your audience, but it can easily offend, confuse and disappoint.

    I’ve been writing copy for a few different social networks and they often need something light-hearted. After puzzling over when, where and how to inject humour into the web copy, I decided to write a sort of ‘humour style guide’ that dictates when it’s okay to use humour.

    This is my own guide (use it if you like):

    Good Funny

    It’s good to be funny:

    • When things go wrong
    • When people don’t follow instructions
    • When you’re giving people a longer explanation of a feature (humour helps break up the educational journey)
    • When it’s appropriate (ha! Whatever that means…)

    Bad Funny

    It’s bad to be funny:

    • All the time (relentless attempts at humour are very tiring)
    • When people just want to get something done
    • When space doesn’t really allow
    • When it obscures meaning
    • When it complicates something that should be simple
    • When it’s forced
    • When it alienates a section of your audience

    Note: this was something I mainly cooked up for MyMotor, a social network for people who love cars. And some of it arose from thinking about how to write for ArtBuzz, a micro-blogging site for art lovers.

    Jargon – persuading your clients to ditch their special words

    Chainsaw Training

    I’ve just been wrestling with copy that’s so thickly coated with toxic jargon that I’ve had to wear a haz-chem suit just to get near it.

    I’ve been working through it slowly, battering sludgy phrasing into sleek, efficient copy that everyone can understand. And then I happened to Tweet about it.

    Clive Andrews asked me how I go about de-jargoning my clients’ copy. After I explained that I just use a mixture of judicious deletions and sensible replacements, Clive asked how I remove jargon without offending my clients. After all, jargon is often industry-specific lingo that helps to exclude outsiders by mystifying simple concepts unite groups by giving them a shared vocabulary, and people get quite attached to their ‘special words’.

    Persuading clients to ditch jargon

    When I’m trying to encourage clients to accept my pruned and de-jargoned copy, I simply insist that clear copy sells, while jargon confuses. I never suggest that jargon is bad because I don’t like it.

    Jargon is bad because it puts a thick blanket of stupid between your words and your reader. Using jargon is like hanging curtains over road signs.

    My other trick for getting clients on the anti-jargon bandwagon is to get other people to do the arguing for me. So if I’m working with a few people in an organisation, I’ll suggest that jargon is probably hampering our goals and then ask the group for their thoughts.

    This strategy is a gamble, because I’m just hoping that my colleagues will argue against the jargon. Luckily, they usually do.

    An earlier blog post about jargon.

    Thanks to Clive Andrews for his questions.

    The Cost of Copy Compared to the Cost of a Website

    A couple of questions that I can’t answer:

    How much does the average company spend on the copy for their website?

    How does the cost of copy compare to the cost of design and development?

    The web business is peculiar. Websites exist to present information, but it seems that in many cases the carrier (the website) is treated as the important thing, not the information.

    To what extent is copy important?

    Do the majority of web designers and web developers have their priorities all wrong? Should we flip the web development process around and focus more attention on the content?

    Should more money be spent on great content, perhaps at the expense of design or features?


    New Project – ADC Brighton

    A quick post to announce a recent copywriting project.

    Alistair Dodd Consulting (ADC) is a firm of architectural designers. Distinct from architects, ADC provide a range of services to property developers, architects, construction companies and home owners, including:

    How to Do More on the Web – Part 4

    See also: P1 / P2 / P3

    Part 4: Helping Searchers Find Your Site with SEO (Search Engine Optimisation)

    People are looking for you. Every day, they go to a search engine (like Google, Yahoo or Ask) and type in the words that reflect their query. The search engine scans the internet, and offers a list of results that match their query.

    If your website appears high up the list, the searcher may click on your site. If your site is the 120th result in the search results, you will probably not receive a visit from that searcher.

    An overwhelming majority of people never make it to the second page of search results. This means that if you’re not on the first page, less than 20% of people will even see your website, and even fewer will actually click through to your site.

    Clearly, it’s crucial to appear as high as possible in the search results whenever people are searching for an organisation like yours.

    Getting Started with SEO

    A good place to start is keywords. Keywords are the words that people use when searching. Your keywords may be your:

    • Company
    • Industry
    • Products
    • Services
    • Brand names
    • Activities
    • Key people
    • Common questions that people ask

    Pretend that you are a potential customer. You are looking for yourself. Now think: what keywords would I use when searching for the things I provide? Make a list of all the words that you would use.

    Think laterally, and remember that not everyone uses the same words to describe a thing. Consider every synonym and possible way of approaching a query.

    Now, go to the Google Keyword Tool, and type in your list of keywords. Google will provide you with an extended list, including every similar term that it thinks is relevant. Bear in mind that Google is just a computer, so it may produce a few bad results.

    Google’s Keyword Tool is useful for two reasons. Firstly, it helps you consider all relevant keywords, and may suggest a few that you hadn’t thought of.

    Secondly, it shows the monthly volume of searches for each term. This means you can see exactly how many people are searching for each keyword – which means you can decide which keywords are worth aiming for.

    A Note on Selecting Keywords

    Because ranking highly in search results requires a concerted effort, you should prioritise the search terms that will bring you people who want to buy something.

    So if you’re a hairdresser, there is little value in attracting a million people who are searching for hairdressing advice. Those people are not likely to be buying anything. A more profitable search term is hairdresser Brighton, as this suggests the searcher is looking for someone to cut their hair.

    Pursue the keywords that will bring in relevant traffic. If a hairdresser appears #1 in search results for hair loss, there is no real benefit. The hairdresser would get lots of visits, but the visitors would not be looking for hairdressing services – making the visit pointless and without value.

    Using Keywords in Your Website

    Google ‘reads’ the pages of your website. If you use words like hairdresser, hair, products, beauty, conditioner, shampoo and styling, then Google will know to offer your website when people search for a hairdresser.

    There are a few important places that keywords should be used:

    • Meta keyword
    • Meta description
    • Page title
    • Headings
    • Sub-headings
    • Body copy
    • Links

    Meta Data

    Meta data is information contained within the code of a website. It’s invisible to human visitors, but readable by search engines. Think of meta data as a signal to the search engines.

    Every single page on your website should have a page title, meta keywords and a meta description. These are all opportunities to tell search engines what that page is about. Don’t be tempted to stuff keywords into these areas – just be honest and use keywords that relate to the content on that page.

    On-Page Keywords

    Headings and sub-headings are deemed to be important carriers of information by the search engines.

    How does a search engine know what text is a heading? Because web developers put headings inside heading tags. The main heading is encased thusly:

    <h1>Main Heading</h1>

    The second heading uses <h2> and so on.

    It’s important that, wherever possible, your headings include relevant keywords for that page. Using keywords in this way does not have to mean artificially stuffing keywords into every space available. It’s often perfectly logical to include keywords in relevant pages, because they help your human visitors to scan a page quickly, and know that it contains relevant information.

    Once you have written headings and sub-headings that contain keywords, ask your web developer to make sure they are contained in heading tags.

    Body Copy

    The text beneath your headings is known as body copy. It’s important that this copy also contains your keywords. Don’t worry about how often your keywords are used.

    Providing that your copy is clearly about the subject you are hoping to appear in search results for, and you use the language that other people use when thinking about that subject, Google will be able to interpret your website correctly.

    Links and Anchor Text

    It’s important to understand how search engines interpret links in your website’s pages. The important thing about every link on your website is your choice of anchor text.

    Anchor text is the text that makes up a link. In this link: Jam Jars, the anchor text is Jam Jars.

    When search engines ‘read’ your web pages, they read and follow links. Because my link to the website of Freeman & Harding has the anchor text Jam Jar, search engines assume that Freeman & Harding has some relation to Jam Jars.

    This is a crucial point. It is very important that you understand how search engines interpret links. Every link on your website has multiple benefits. Links not only help your visitors to navigate your site, but they help search engines understand where your links are pointing.

    If you use anchor text without keywords, you lose an opportunity to guide the search engines’ interpretation of your website.

    Link Anchor Text Example

    A hairdresser might have a link on their Home page, leading visitors to their Products page.

    Good: Now view our professional range of hairdressing products

    Bad: Click to view our hairdressing products

    The good example contains relevant keywords, and gives search engines some context. The bad example is a wasted opportunity, unless you are hoping to rank highly for something as generic as products (which would be folly).

    Links to Your Website (Backlinks)

    Search engines use complicated mathematical models to calculate the relevance of websites to a searcher’s query. One piece of the equation is the number of links to your website from other sites.

    These links are also known as backlinks. Search engines consider every link to your site to be an indicator of quality, on the assumption that nobody would link to your website if you had nothing good to offer. The more links your site has pointing to it, the better the search engines’ perception of your site.

    This is why many website owners will beg, steal and borrow in order to gain good links to their website. Good links are valuable, and can have a significant influence on your site’s performance in search results.

    Good Links, Bad Links

    Not every link is good. A link to your website from a ‘bad neighbourhood’ – a part of the web populated by spammers – is not worth much, and could even lower your site’s reputation.

    Links are good when they are placed in good, reputable websites. Good links are also those that use keyword-rich anchor text.

    If somebody wants to link to your website, ask them to use anchor text that reflects the keywords people use when looking for you.

    Developing Good Links

    It’s not easy to gain links. The best approach is to offer things that other people want. Then people will want to link to your website. Without some kind of useful content, it’s hard to justify links to your site.

    Guides, tutorials, resources, interviews, articles and blogs and are all good, honest ways of providing useful material that people will want to link to.

    One effective strategy is to write articles for other websites. Many blogs request contributions from outsiders – and these normally offer authors a by-line (a one-line bio that says who you are and what you do) and a link or two to your website.

    Writing one-off articles for good, well-established blogs takes time, but you will gain good links from a quality website. The alternative is…

    Article Marketing

    An article marketing industry exists which purports to help people gain links by offering their articles for free to any website owners who want them. It’s a nice idea, but the reality is that the only site owners who want these generic – often poorly written – articles are spammers or people with low-grade blogs. So you might get a few links, but they will be from such poor sites that they provide absolutely no SEO value. Good links come from good sites with at least some PageRank.

    Directory Submission

    Many people believe that submitting their site to hundreds or thousands of directories is the easy way to gain links. While you will gain plenty of links, those links will be buried in the depths of dusty directories, far from the eyes of man and a long way from anywhere valuable.

    DMOZ is the most important directory, closely followed by Yahoo (which you will have to pay for). Join a few other directories, but don’t invest a huge amount of time in this. Very few people use directories to search for businesses.

    Further reading: Bad SEO: Polluting the Web

    Advertising

    There are many ways to advertise on the web. Advertising can be costly, but it can also be very effective. A well-judged ad in a well-chosen space can drive significant numbers of qualified visitors to your website.

    Google Ads

    If you decide to run a Google Adwords campaign, one of the most important things to do is to run two different adverts for the same product or service. Monitor which ad is more successful, then replace the less successful ad with something better. Running a split campaign allows you to constantly refine your ads.

    Because Google Ads are very small, the copy must be used with care. Every word counts!

    Example:

    London Cocktail Bar

    Covent Garden Cocktail Bar WC2
    No Hire Fee for Private Parties
    www.theinternational.uk.com

    A note of caution

    It’s easy to spend lots of money with Google Adwords. They can be very successful, but make sure that the return warrants the investment.

    Writing for Your Customers – Your Web Copy

    The words on your website’s pages are what do the work of selling, persuading, inspiring or communicating. Graphic design, imagery and clever web technologies like Flash help to create an impression, but it’s the copy that talks to your visitors*.

    (* Unless you’re offering complex or novel software or web applications, in which case a professional screencast may be the best way to demonstrate your offering. Not sure what a screencast is? Ask me – I can recommend a professional screencaster.)

    At the start of this guide I asked you to think about your customers. When you come to write copy, draw on your findings. Your copy must appeal to your visitors. It should start by telling them quickly and clearly what’s on offer. Then it should explain why that offer should interest them.

    Make sure your copy details the features of your products and services. Then, explain how those features provide benefits to the user.

    Further reading:
    Writing for the Web – A Quick Guide on What to Write and How to Write It
    10 Ways to Instantly Improve Your Marketing Copy

    How do Your Customers Think About Your Products?

    What language do they use? Make sure you use this language in your copy. Your internal corporate language may be jargon-rich, and intimidating or nonsensical to outsiders. Don’t try to sound clever or ‘professional’ by littering your copy with fancy words that only industry-insiders will understand.

    Good copy is conversational and uses words that everyone understands.

    Bad copy is cold, formal, and distancing.

    Good copy brings people into your world.

    Bad copy creates a barrier.

    Short sentences are good. Contractions (can’t, don’t) are good.

    Simple, plain English is good. Clarity is good.

    When writing copy, aim to deliver a message. As soon as the message is delivered you can (and should) stop writing.

    Ask a friend or colleague to review your copy. The best reviewer is someone who is unfamiliar with your products, services and industry.

    Ask them if, after reading your copy, they understand your offer enough to consider buying something from you.

    Provide Detailed Information (for Those Who Want It)

    While it’s important to deliver information carefully, in a controlled manner, don’t forget that visitors to your site may have many questions. You need to answer their questions.

    Ensure that detailed information about your products, services, working methods, company structure, key personnel, qualifications, contact details, clients, experiences, attitudes, world-views and waist measurements is available to those who want it.

    Obviously, the key thing is to make this information available, but not unavoidable. Don’t litter the path of the fleet-footed – the nimble visitor who wants a modicum of information before they decide whether or not to contact you.

    Calls to Action

    Your website exists to achieve something. Whatever that may be, it probably requires your visitors to take some kind of action. Now, if you want somebody to vote, or buy, or register, then you must ask them to do so.

    The simple of act of asking a visitor to take a course of action is called a Call to Action. It’s as easy as writing:

    • Order now
    • Subscribe here
    • Register today

    This may sound obvious, but it’s often overlooked. The Call to Action is an essential ingredient in successful websites.

    Social Proof – Evidence of Previous Interactions

    Because the web is fertile ground for spammers, con-artists and thieves, web users are naturally cautious and suspicious. If you want to sell on the web, you’ll need to address this issue. How can you build trust with just your website?

    One very simple and honest tactic is to harness the power of social proof. Social proof can be provided in the form of testimonials, client logos, a portfolio of past work – anything that proves that your organisation has done real work with real people.

    It’s good to get into the habit of requesting testimonials from clients. If you’re shy, try LinkedIn’s interface for requesting recommendations. This way you don’t have to put anyone on the spot.

    If possible, display testimonials with links back to the person or company who provided it. This gives your social proof depth and authenticity.

    Giving It All Away

    Offering a sample or some kind of free trial is a good way to begin a business relationship with your new customers. Free samples are another way to overcome the problem of trust: by sampling your goods or services for free, people can evaluate your offering without any risk.

    Improving Your Search Engine Performance by Providing Useful Content

    A popular strategy for getting more visitors is content. If you are an accountant, your website may not be very interesting. You can reasonably expect people to visit your site when they want an accountant. Everybody else is going to ignore you.

    Clearly, if you’re an accountant and would like a more lively website, you’re going to have to add something more interesting. If you provide useful or informative information – in the form of guides, articles, calculators, widgets, links, tools or advice – then people will visit your site. People will also link to your website, which will help your search engine performance.

    A great example of providing useful content to customers and website visitors is http://www.yorkshireaccountancy.co.uk/

    Creating a Journey through Your Website

    Every page of your website should have pathways. Always give your visitors places to go. Each page should lead logically to the next. Gradually lead each visitor through your website – enticing them with your product’s benefits, explaining your product’s features, answering all of their questions about the ordering process, reassuring any concerns they might have, and finally asking them to place an order.

    Contact Details

    Make it easy for people to contact you. Don’t hide email addresses – you may be worried about spam but a good spam filter will prevent 99% of junk getting through. Have a contact form, but also provide an address, a phone number and all relevant email addresses. Websites that only offer a contact form appear to be distancing themselves from their audience, or just plain hiding.

    Further reading:

    Gaining Trust on the Web

    Social Media

    ‘Social Media’ means blogs, Facebook, YouTube, Twitter, forums – any media that involves or allows social interaction. Social media allows a website to exist in other spaces. Social media allows you to appear before new eyes – finding a new audience and expanding your reach.

    Social media is difficult for businesses to use well, because these are largely social spaces, not commercial. The people who inhabit social spaces often resent organisations that burst in with a marketing agenda.

    If you want to explore social media, and how it might help your organisation, step in cautiously – listen, look, and contribute gently. Represent you first and your company second.

    Further reading:

    Twitter: Make the Most of Every Tweet (You Receive)

    Corporate Twittering: A Marketing Mess in a Social Space?

    Why Twitter? – Method in the Mayhem

    Twitter – the Simplest Little Big Complicated Website in the World

    Straplines

    One of the most crucial aspects of a successful website is clarity. From any page, at any point in your website, it should be immediately obvious where you are, and what is being offered.

    A strapline, tagline or slogan is the short sentence that accompanies an organisation’s logo at the top of their website.

    The strapline is a good opportunity to increase clarity, and explain exactly what you do.

    Good straplines are descriptive and short. Bad straplines are witty, clever or vague, such as: Creative solutions for business.

    The End

    That’s it for now. I’ll compile all of this guide into a PDF for you to download. As I probably said at the start, I wanted to put down a few ideas for selling on the web – a few basics that website owners should know.

    Let me know if I’ve missed anything significant!

    Hype vs Passion: Perfectly Judged Web Copy

    Hype-filled website copy

    Copywriters face a common conundrum: how do you inject copy with energy and excitement without it reading like a horrible heap of hype?

    I’ve been reading around, trying to work out exactly what makes powerful copy that excites people but doesn’t turn them off with the ripe stench of fraud.

    Copy that’s redolent of hype makes readers lose trust – and when trust is lost, so too are sales.

    It seems that the factors that influence whether copy reads like hype or not can be easily categorised:

    The Good Stuff

    You can grab attention and get people thinking about your products by telling them captivating stories, or by painting a picture with words.

    Powerful words also help your messages to leap from the page and smack your reader in the face. (Powerful words are difficult to quantify, because it depends very much on their context. And many ‘powerful’ words are overused – which dilutes their power. But any word that carries energy or powerful connotations in the context that you’re using them in can be considered powerful.)

    Clichés will never be powerful – so avoid them.

    The Bad Stuff

    Energy becomes hype when you use exclamation marks too much!!! See?

    Copy that has loads of energy but no evidence to reinforce claims made is prime hype material. If you want to shout about something that’s amazing, make sure you back up those claims with evidence (authentic testimonials, client names etc).

    Unrealistic claims. Don’t exaggerate. If a product could theoretically make a person a million dollars in a minute, but real people had only managed to earn a hundred dollars in a week, don’t be tempted to trade on the potential power of the product. Keep it real!

    New Project – Topsail Events

    Just a quick post to announce the launch of my latest copywriting work, for Topsail Events.

    Topsail Events are a very well established marine events company, who do amazing Thames cruises, corporate events, private parties and elegant weddings on motor cruisers, tall ships, Thames river barges and paddle steamers.

    If you’re looking for an unusual venue for a special occasion, give Mark and his team a call!

    How to Do More on the Web – Part 2

    (Part 1: How to Do More on the Web: A Few Ideas)

    Part 2: Thinking about Your Products and Services (Your Offering)

    Okay, so you know what you’re selling, but do you know what people are buying?

    If you’re selling books, your customers are buying information, knowledge and entertainment. If you’re selling cars, your customers are buying freedom, independence and a romantic idea. If you’re selling beds, your customers are buying a good night’s sleep, relaxation and comfort.

    Whatever it is that you’re selling, think about what your customers are thinking about when they’re buying.

    Make the Most of Your Features and Benefits

    Another way of thinking about the difference between the thinking of the buyer and seller is to think about features and benefits.

    The features of a product are things like:

    •    Stainless steel construction
    •    Dual-core processor
    •    Available in 200 colours

    These features mean something else to your customers. To a buyer, features translate into benefits.  Benefits like:

    •    Won’t rust
    •    Handles multiple applications without crashing
    •    You can find one that suits you

    Whenever you present a product or service on the web, mention the benefits as well as the features. It may sound like rudimentary advice, but it’s an essential part of any website. Many organisations fail to clearly present the basis of their offer. What seems obvious to you, from within your organisation, is potentially alien to your visitors.

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    Do People Understand?

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